今天上午你們班舉行了愛心義賣(charity sale)活動,同學(xué)們把自制的飛機(jī)模型、風(fēng)箏等手工作品帶到操場義賣。本次活動進(jìn)展順利,義賣所得款項(xiàng)全部捐給希望工程(Project Hope)。請你以日記的形式記錄本次活動的過程,并談?wù)劵顒痈惺堋?/p>
要求:
1.緊扣主題,適當(dāng)發(fā)揮;
2.詞數(shù)80左右;(日記開頭已給出,但不計(jì)入總詞數(shù))
3.日記中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和人名。
Thursday, March 12th Sunny
This morning our class had a charity sale on our school
playground.______________________________________________________
Thursday, March 12th Sunny
This morning our class had a charity sale on our school playground. It was really a great success today. Many people came to our fair to buy things. They liked them very much because all these plane models and kites were made by ourselves. We were so excited that our works were liked by those people. And also we were glad to see so many people want to help those children, we gave away all the money that we made to Project Hope. I think we did a great thing and made this day special.
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這篇文章就事論事,語句流暢。典型的總分總結(jié)構(gòu),將整個文章脈絡(luò)清晰地鋪開來。really一詞的運(yùn)用為整個文章埋下伏筆,與最后一句交相生輝。excited一詞的運(yùn)用,形象地體現(xiàn)了小作者的寫作心態(tài)和自豪感。our works were liked by those people...被動語態(tài)運(yùn)用恰當(dāng),體現(xiàn)了小作者比較強(qiáng)的語言運(yùn)用能力。此外,小作者書寫認(rèn)真,也是博得閱讀老師喜愛的重要原因。