【第一篇：How to get to the science 】
We are going to the science museum tomorrow. There is an old thing show in the Museum. Do you know how we can get to the science museum?
The science museum is next to the People’s Park. It’s isn’t far from our school. So we can go there on foot .Walk straight to the west from our school, next turn left at the post office and walk for about 5 minutes, then turn right at traffic lights. You can find the People’s Park on the right . Walk straight, and you’ll see the science museum.
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這篇作文的題目是“怎樣去科學(xué)博物館”。怎樣才算是一篇好作文呢?通過你的敘述，能讓別人很容易找到博物館，這應(yīng)是最基本的要求。小作者在文中告訴我們什么呢?首先他寫了去博物館的位置，最后濃墨重彩，指明從學(xué)校去博物館的具體路線，這條路線夠清晰吧!
小朋友們在寫這類作文的時(shí)候，總有些無從下手的感覺，不知從何說起。其實(shí)介紹路線，無非就是告訴他人某段路的起點(diǎn)和終點(diǎn)，還有就是如何從起點(diǎn)走到終點(diǎn)。要給他人說清楚，你自己首先得清楚，然后再通過自己的敘述，將路線清清楚楚得呈現(xiàn)出來。一定要注意行文中一些關(guān)鍵的地方，如在哪兒轉(zhuǎn)彎，向哪兒轉(zhuǎn)，經(jīng)過哪些重要的交通標(biāo)志或顯眼的標(biāo)志建筑等。這樣，你就能說清，別人也能弄明白。
【第二篇：I Love My Family】
Here is a photo lf my family. These are four people in my family. They are my father, my mother, my brother and I.
My father is a doctor. He works in a hospital far away. He goes to work by subway. My mother is a teacher. She works in a school near my home. She goes to work by bike. After work, they like reading books. Who is the tall boy? He is my brother. He is five years older than me. He is a singer. He’s now in Beijing. He goes there by plane. I love my family.
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一個(gè)平凡的題材，一篇生動(dòng)的作文。這樣的命題，我們可能面對(duì)幾次，甚至幾十次了。但這位小朋友的筆端很是靈巧，了了數(shù)言，讓一個(gè)幸福的家庭躍然紙上，很值得我們?nèi)ニ伎迹覀兡茏龅絾?
小朋友的這篇作文除了語言優(yōu)美之外，在結(jié)構(gòu)上也有閃光之處。先總說，將自己的家人逐個(gè)介紹一遍，后分說，把家人的工作、上班方式，愛好一一細(xì)說。最后以一句話進(jìn)行概括，起到點(diǎn)題的作用。我們在寫類似的作文的時(shí)候是不是也可以借鑒呢?
【第三篇：Don’t be against the 】
I go to school from Monday to Friday .I go to school by bike at 7:30 in the morning .I must cross two busy roads .If the traffic light is red or yellow,I know I can’t cross the road ,so I wait.
If the light turns green, I know it means “Go”, and then I walk across the road .I always ride on the right side of the road .I am never against the traffic rules.
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這篇作文的題目是“不要違反交通規(guī)則”，小作者沒有說一些空話，而是從自己的經(jīng)歷寫起，敘述自己以什么方式去上學(xué)，在上學(xué)的路上是怎么做的，很形象。
小朋友們在作文時(shí)注意不要圖大，那樣很容易使文章顯得空洞，而要寫自己身邊熟悉的事情。要注意行文中字母的大小寫、句子的標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)等。
